Sunday, 25 September 2011

Through the tunnel

 Setting- At the beach, on a wild bay.

Plot
Jerry was just a little boy. He liked to do things that any normal boy would do. He liked to swimm and spend time with his mom. Jerry did not have a father and his mom was all that he had. Jerry was everything that his mom had. On a holiday vacation jerry and his mom spend everyday at the beach; relaxing and doing all sorts of exciting things. Jerry discovered the wild bay and really wanted to go closer. He knew that his mom would not like to go alone to the beach but he got permission to go to the wild bay. Jerry met some little boys, he was excited to meet people his own age. They could not understand eachother but he was happy. He finally discovered a tunnel under the water, he was so determined to swimm through it. He tried several times, got home with a bleeding nose but that did not stop him. He got swimming goggles from his mom and he gave it his best that day.Jerry finally managed to swimm through the tunnel.

Main charecter
Jerry was the main charecter; he was just 11 years old. Jerry was a white english boy, and he did not have a father. Jerry was such a considerate little boy, always considering his moms feelings. He was a loner because he did not have friends, his mom was all he had. He was such a courages boy, always ready for new adventures. He was not like other ordinery little boys because he enjoyed doing dangerous things.

3 comments:

  1. I give you a 8/10 the reaon being you did high light the main points of the story, But however there are a few spelling mistakes. Perhaps you did not notice them but you need to look into it.

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  2. I give you a 8/10 because you high lighted the main points, But there are some spelling mistakes.Please look into that.

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  3. Hey i am glad that you got to read my blog. Thank you for the positive comments. English is a crazy language, lol.

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